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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In some nations, companies allow individuals to perform in their house,
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 others offer office-based
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 to my personal opinion regarding productivity and creativity. On one hand , working from home is a beneficial path for firms, as it conserves money and efforts to engineer and build offices, which can be used in other areas
such
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 as paid vacation and
bonus
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, and
as a result
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, it will enhance
employees
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' performance and creativity.
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,
according to
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 a recent study, the
employees
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 of companies who offer a home-based job
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 achieve a higher number of tasks than firms with an office-based job, because of the saved money, rather than
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offices
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 building, it can be
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 as a supply and bonus for
employees
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On the other hand
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, working from
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 improves the relationship among
employees
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, as in-person communication has a deep effect on
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 among workers,
in contrast
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 with online
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This
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 feature is an important advantage
especially
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 in
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group project
works
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, as it allows workers to communicate easily on specific subjects and
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small details.
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 , a recent study conducted by researchers
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suggest
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 that
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office based
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work
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 can accomplish
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a project 3 times
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faster than
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a
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digital
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. In conclusion,
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remote
work
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 is a great option for companies as it can save money that was used in building Workplaces and using it in paid vacation and bonuses.
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work
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 on-site has the ability to foster
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relationships among staff, which will be an effective way , especially in a group project.
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, I personally prefer a remote environment
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as it seems more convenient for a lot of problems

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planning
Plan your answer first. Write a short plan that says you will look at both sides and then give your own view. In the body, keep one main idea per paragraph and add a simple example. End with a short line that states your view clearly.
linking
Make the flow clear. Use small linking words to show how ideas go from one to the next, like also, but, however, and for example.
language
Use simple, safe language. Check big grammar and spelling errors. Stick to common words and short sentences.
task response
The essay tries to cover both sides and gives a view.
cohesion
Some clear examples are used to back ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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