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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

Some
people
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 agree that the public mode of transportation is
best
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best,
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whereas
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 others are of the view that travelling in your own car is better. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both positive and negative ramifications of
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,
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 and will explicate my point. First and foremost, with the increasing traffic
now a days
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, it is better to use the public bus, rather than taking your own vehicle, as it saves us from the trouble of driving in
such
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populated
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 area, which in turn saves a lot of self-energy.
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,
while
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 going to work, if a person has to drive through
the
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 extensively populated highway,
he
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loses
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 the enthusiasm to work for the rest of the day. Another plus point of using
a
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public transport is
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 that it is cost-effective and
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, one has to spend less on
the
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gas and petrol for the vehicle.
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 to mention that,
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public
transits
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transit
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are
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is
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also
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 a safe way to travel because
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 it decreases the risk of accidents happening, due
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people
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 hurrying to save time. When we talk about negative sides, the first thing that comes to my mind is
time-wastage
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. If a person
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 public conveyance, he has to make sure
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 that there is proper
time-management
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, which is sufficient for them to reach their destination without getting late.
Seondly
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Secondly
,
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also
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 subjected to health hazards, as so many
people
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 will be using it,
thus
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 aggravating the chances of spreading
of
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the
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communicable diseases.
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, during
corona
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the coronavirus
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 pandemic,
people
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 were advised not to use mass
transits
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transit
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 because it would put them at
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risk of exposure to the virus. Conclusively, I would say that there are both positive and negative sides
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 using a shared means of transport.
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, using it would help us to decrease pollution and avoid
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accidents,
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whereas
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 not using it would help us avoid health hazards and save time
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 it will consume more gas and will be less
environment-friendly
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environmentally friendly
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structure
Plan the essay: have an intro, two body parts (one for each view), then a final idea.
coherence
Use clear linking words to move from one idea to the next.
vocabulary
Choose simple, correct words and avoid hard phrases.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling in every paragraph, especially verb forms and punctuation.
content
Give a specific example or number to show a point.
structure
The essay follows a basic plan: intro, body, and conclusion.
content
It talks about both sides, not just one view.
coherence
It uses some linking words to join ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public transport
  • car
  • pros and cons
  • save money
  • save time
  • traffic
  • parking
  • pollution
  • delays
  • crowded
  • timetable
  • schedule
  • reliable
  • flexible
  • safety
  • comfort
  • convenient
  • green air
  • environment
  • city life
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