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The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students, and junior lecturers at an Australian university

The pie charts below illustrate the number of journal articles read per week by all students, PhD students, and junior lecturers at an Australian university
The bellow pie charts compare how many journal
articles
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 have been read weekly by three categories of
students
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, namely all of them,
PhD
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students
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, and junior lecturers at an Australian university.
It is clear that
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 the
PhD
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students
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 read the largest
number
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 of
articles
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 per
week
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.
In contrast
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, by taking a look at the pie chart of all
students
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, it is comprehended that the majority of them read the least
number
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 of
articles
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 every
week
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. The vast majority of all
students
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, approximately 70% of them, read only 1 to 5 journal
articles
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 weekly. In comparison, 5 per cent of
PhD
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students
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 and only 1 per cent of junior lecturers read
this
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number
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 of
articles
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 per
week
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. Three-quarters of the junior lecturers read 6 to 11
articles
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 in a
week
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.
However
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,
this
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 figure contains 15% of
PhD
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students
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 and just over one-fifth of all
students
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. In
regards
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 to reading 12
articles
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 and more in a
week
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,
PhD
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students
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 are the pioneers. 80 per cent of them read 12 or more
articles
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 weekly, making them the group of
students
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 who read the largest
number
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 of
articles
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 weekly. Almost a quarter of juniors and 12% of all
students
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 tend to read
this
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number
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 of
articles
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 in a
week
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words articles, students, phd, number, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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