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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
The maps illustrate information concerning the comparison of public
library
Fix the agreement mistake
libraries
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 from 20 years
ago
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ago,
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 where everything
have
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has
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change
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changed
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 nowadays.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that every corner
have
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has
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 been modified ,and the tables and chairs have been removed in the middle of the floor plan.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 20 years ago, the library had
the
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a
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 CDs, videos and computer games
zone
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was
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apply
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located on the left of the plan.
Therefore
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,
adult
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the adult
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fiction
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 book
zone
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 was down under the CDs
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zone
Punctuation problem
zone,
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 where next to has reading
room
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. Moving to the other
, the
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side, the
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 tables and chairs were in the middle of
plan
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the plan
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.
the
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The
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 children's
books
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was
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were
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stood
Wrong verb form
standing
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 on the top right of the corner ,
while
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 the enquiry desk was set on the bottom right ,which had
adult
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an adult
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 non-
fiction
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books
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zone
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 between both. Nowadays, everything
have
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has
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 changed.
Firstly
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, the storytelling events and children's
fiction
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books
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 are
stood
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held
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 where
are
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apply
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the CDs
zone
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 is located.
Secondly
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,
All
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all
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 reference
books
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 and
computer
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the computer
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room
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 are located bottom from the children's
fiction
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books
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books,
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 where have been adult
fiction
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 book and
reading
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a reading
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room
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zone
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, respectively.
Thirdly
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, on the top and bottom right
corner
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corners
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 lecture
room
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 and cafe are the newest
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zone
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zones
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.
Lastly
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, the significant
changing
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change
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 is
the
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that the
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 tables and chairs have been removed.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words zone, fiction, room, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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