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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your latter •Explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months •Say how your work could be done while you are away •Ask for his/her help in arranging it

Dear Sir, I am writing a letter to you about my job in our company. I want to spend six months working in our head office in England because I have some reasons.
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, I can learn a lot in there and
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 will help our company in the future. I love England because
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it is beautiful and has a lot of club football. When I go to England, I can complete all tasks by TeamViewer
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 you can call me anytime. I have to complete some tasks in the next month , but I was introduced to Mr.X,so I believe he will complete the task on time. I hope you see
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 letter and you will help arrange it for me. Thank you very much. Best regards, Tuan Tai

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clarity
State clearly why you want six months at the head office and how it helps the company; keep aim short and clear.
planning
Give a simple plan for work while away; say how tasks will be done and who will help.
relevance
Cut parts that do not push work aims, like details about England or football.
request
Ask for a talk or meeting and say what support you need from your manager.
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph; do not mix many ideas in one paragraph.
tone
Polite tone and a clear wish to help the firm.
content
Shows use of online tools to work from afar.
style
Respectful closing.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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