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The chart shows information about the actual and expected figures of population in three cities, Jakarta, Sao Paulo, and Shanghai. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows information about the actual and expected figures of population in three cities, Jakarta, Sao Paulo, and Shanghai. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph compares the actual size of the
population
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 in 1990 and 2000 and the predicted one in 2000 in three cities, Jakarta, Shanghai and Sao Paulo.
It is clear that
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 all three cities saw
population
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 growth from 1990 to 2000, and that the actual sizes of the
population
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 in 2000 overtook the projected ones. The
population
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 size of
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São
 Paulo remained the largest of the three during the period, followed by Shanghai and Jakarta. In 1990,
this
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 number was recorded at over 15 million, which was almost twice the figure of Jakarta.
This
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 trend continued in 2000, when the
population
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 size in
Sao
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São
 Paulo increased
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 than 5 million. As compared to the predicted figure, all cities experienced bigger
population
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 growth in 2000. The biggest gap was seen in Shanghai. Its
population
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 was projected to decrease from 1990 to 2000,
while
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 it actually grew by around 3 million during the same
priod
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period
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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