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Some people do not wish to get married today. Many consider this as a negative development for the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Marriage
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 is an important part of
everyones
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everyone's
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 life. Most
individuals
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, irrespective of
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gender
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gender,
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 are getting married to their loved ones and on top of that, there are some
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 who even
advocates
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advocate
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 for
marriage
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 and the happiness that comes
along with
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 it.
Now-a-days
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Nowadays
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, some
individuals
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 are breaking these general norms and
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do
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 not have any desire or cravings towards
marriage
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. Most of them contemplate and
scrutinize
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this
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,
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 as a negative development for
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society.
However
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, I strongly disagree
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 their perspective. To start with, I would like to shed some light on
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 why I ponder that
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 it can be an effective and positive
evalution
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evaluation
. People who are not married
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 can focus on themselves, have all the time in the world to spend with the
individuals
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 they like and
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 not have any restrictions. They generally feel like
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 they are less obligated to
some one
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someone
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,
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 who might or might not
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be equally
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 invested in an emotional aspect.
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, you never know what the other person thinks and what sets them off, which kind of makes them
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walk on a ticking bomb, which can explode at any given time. So, how can a person who is emotionally stable without any external
distrubances
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disturbances
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be
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 a negative
delevoplemt
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development
 for the community? Adding to
this
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, when comparing the past and present, the concept of
marriage
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 has
been
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changed widely. Over the past few decades, there
are
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 too many false accusations and
aligations
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allegations
, which
resulted
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have resulted
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 in the separation or
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divorce, where a vast amount of
alimonies
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 has been involved.
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,
instead
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 of marrying for love, people had a
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 turn over and started marrying for financial benefits and gains
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, which
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 resulted in emotional detachments.
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, to escape
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 and to have a healthy lifestyle where they are not judged and can lead a peaceful and happy life, many
individuals
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 believe that staying single is the most effective approach and an ideal solution. In summary, people who do not wish to get married
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 not affecting
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society in a negative way
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instead
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, they are focusing on themselves and trying to develop the community in the best possible way they can.

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task response
Task response: state your view clearly and give a few reasons with simple, real examples; some ideas are not well tied to the prompt.
coherence
Coherence & cohesion: use linking words to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
grammar
Grammar/ spelling: many errors obscure meaning; use short, simple sentences and check spellings.
task
Clear stance on the issue.
content
Some good idea about changes in society.

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