Some people think it would be a good idea for school to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this option ? Describe the skill a person needs to be a good parent.

In today's society, finding solutions to societal challenges has become increasingly important.Within different communities,

issue

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like pollution have surfaced as significant obstacles that demand immediate consideration. From my perspective,it is crucial to identify practical and sustainable solutions to address these. Needless to say, there

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cluster of causes behind it. Growth in population can presumably be the biggest single cause

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with many other causes.

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structure

Add a clear start and end. Write a first sentence that shows your view. End with a short wrap up.

content

Give more detail. For each idea, say why it matters and give one small example.

grammar

Fix basic errors in grammar and word form. For example, 'issue like pollution' should be 'issues like pollution'; use 'the' with some ideas; check plural and tense.

coherence

Use linking words to show how ideas fit together, like 'however', 'also', 'for example'.

content strength

The topic is clear and the write shows what pollution is a big pick.

lexical strength

The essay uses some good word such as 'solutions' and 'address' to show a good idea.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

65 words

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