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Band 6.5

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter, explain why you have changed your job describe your new job tell him/her your other news

Dear Zen, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well and in the best spirits. I am writing
this
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 letter to tell you about my recent experience
in
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 a new company. You know very well that I stayed away from my parents for the
last
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 3 years.
Also
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, I felt
homesickness
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.
That is
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 why
,
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 I tried to find a suitable job in that area, where I can live with my loved ones. Fortunately, I got an interview from a nearby city, and I was selected for a particular position in their company. I have joined the organisation as a human resource manager. My role involves training and recruiting new employees by conducting their interviews.
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, in the company, I make a good connection with all of the staff, and encourage them to increase productivity as well. I just forgot to tell you that a traditional fair is going to
held
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 in my area. You have a keen interest in learning the history and culture of distinct regions. I am inviting you to come and be a part of
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 fair. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon! Best wishes, Sam.

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structure
Put one idea in each part.
content
Say why you changed job, then how your work is, then other news.
coherence
Use short, clear lines and one idea per line.
grammar
Check your grammar, like is, am, and have.
tone
Keep a warm tone and end with a kind goodbye.
presentation
Nice start with Dear Zen and a friendly fold.
content
You state why you change job and what you do clearly.
tone
You invite your friend to a fair, which shows a kind tone.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I started a new job
  • I left my old job
  • I changed my job
  • why I changed job
  • I wanted to learn more
  • I wanted a better fit
  • I wanted a better work life balance
  • the old job did not fit
  • the new job is a good fit
  • title: project helper
  • I work with a team
  • my main tasks are
  • plan small projects
  • keep track of tasks
  • help the team
  • talk to clients
  • answer emails
  • keep files in order
  • the work is busy
  • I like it
  • I learn new things every day
  • the office is near my home
  • the people are friendly
  • I am happy with the move
  • my other news
  • I joined a weekend club
  • I cook more at home
  • I plan to visit
  • write back
  • take care
  • your friend
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