You are living in the university complex, and you have a problem with loud noise from a campus restaurants that stays open until midnight. Write a letter to higher authorities of the university. -Complain about the situation -Why this is a problem? -Propose way to reduce the noise?
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing
this
letter to express my concern that Linking Words
me
Correct pronoun usage
apply
and my roommates
Correct word order
my roommates and
have
been facing Correct pronoun usage
I have
from
the Change preposition
for
last
two months.
I Linking Words
Amarpreet
Punctuation problem
, Amarpreet
singh
, student of supply chain management, roll no 1528. Let me explain the situation, beside my hostel Fix capitalization
Singh
room
there is a campus restaurant that stays open till midnight. Punctuation problem
room,
Although
I have been living at the hostel for Linking Words
the
two years and did not face any problems, the new Correct article usage
apply
joinees
are creating a lot of Correct your spelling
joiners
distrubance
, especially at Correct your spelling
disturbance
mid night
at the restaurant.
The kitchen staff is very cooperative as they cause any trouble or noise, but Use the right word
midnight
new
enrolled Replace the word
newly
students
Use synonyms
comes
late Correct subject-verb agreement
come
night
Change preposition
at night
drunk
from Punctuation problem
, drunk
parities
and play loud music Use the right word
parties
while
eating dinner. Linking Words
As a result
, many Linking Words
students
Use synonyms
either are
Correct word order
are either
not able
to concentrate on their studies or sleep. Correct word choice
unable
While
we already requested them to stop playing music at high volume, especially at Linking Words
nights
, they did not even bother about it.
I would request you either grant the Fix the agreement mistake
night
premission
to close the restaurant after 8 PM or take Correct your spelling
permission
approriate
action regarding these Correct your spelling
appropriate
students
to ensure that Use synonyms
rest
of the Correct article usage
the rest
students
can have Use synonyms
peaceful
atmosphere. I would appreciate it if you could consider these suggestions Correct article usage
a peaceful
and
Punctuation problem
, and
hoping
that Wrong verb form
I hope
It
would greatly improve Fix capitalization
it
hostel
environment.
Yours sincerely,
Amarpreet Singh.Correct article usage
the hostel
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language
Fix the spelling and grammar. Some parts are hard to read.
structure
Break the text into 2 or 3 short paragraphs. One idea per paragraph is easier to read.
content
Be clear on what you ask. Add more detail about time and how the noise harms study.
tone
The letter has a proper Dear Sir/Madam at the start and Yours sincerely at the end.
content
It does ask for action to fix the noise.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite