You are living in the university complex, and you have a problem with loud noise from a campus restaurants that stays open until midnight. Write a letter to higher authorities of the university. -Complain about the situation -Why this is a problem? -Propose way to reduce the noise?

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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letter to express my concern that
me
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and my roommates
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my roommates and
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have
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I have
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been facing
from
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for
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the
last
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two months. I
Amarpreet
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, Amarpreet
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singh
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Singh
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, student of supply chain management, roll no 1528. Let me explain the situation, beside my hostel
room
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there is a campus restaurant that stays open till midnight.
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I have been living at the hostel for
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two years and did not face any problems, the new
joinees
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joiners
are creating a lot of
distrubance
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disturbance
, especially at
mid night
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at the restaurant. The kitchen staff is very cooperative as they cause any trouble or noise, but
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enrolled
students
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comes
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come
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late
night
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at night
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drunk
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, drunk
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from
parities
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parties
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and play loud music
while
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eating dinner.
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, many
students
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either are
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are either
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not able
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unable
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to concentrate on their studies or sleep.
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we already requested them to stop playing music at high volume, especially at
nights
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night
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, they did not even bother about it. I would request you either grant the
premission
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permission
to close the restaurant after 8 PM or take
approriate
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appropriate
action regarding these
students
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to ensure that
rest
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of the
students
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can have
peaceful
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a peaceful
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atmosphere. I would appreciate it if you could consider these suggestions
and
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hoping
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I hope
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that
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it
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would greatly improve
hostel
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the hostel
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environment. Yours sincerely, Amarpreet Singh.

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language
Fix the spelling and grammar. Some parts are hard to read.
structure
Break the text into 2 or 3 short paragraphs. One idea per paragraph is easier to read.
content
Be clear on what you ask. Add more detail about time and how the noise harms study.
tone
The letter has a proper Dear Sir/Madam at the start and Yours sincerely at the end.
content
It does ask for action to fix the noise.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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