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The graph compares the revenue from Fairtrade-lablled coffee and bananas in five European countries between 1999 and 2004.

The graph compares the revenue from Fairtrade-lablled coffee and bananas in five European countries between 1999 and 2004.
The graph compares the revenue from
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coffee
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 and bananas in five European
countries
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 between 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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,
coffee
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sales
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 had an upward trend in all
countries
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,
while
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 two
countries
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 witnessed a decline in banana
sales
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. The UK saw the most significant increase in
coffee
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,
whereas
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Switzerland
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 remained the largest market for bananas throughout the period. In terms of
coffee
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, the UK’s revenue rose from 1.5
million
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 in 1999 to 20
million
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 in 2004, representing the most substantial increase among all
countries
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.
Switzerland
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, which had the highest income at 3
million
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 in 1999, doubled its figure to 6
million
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.
However
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, the lowest figure can be found in Sweden in both years, rising from 0.8m to 1m. The remaining
countries
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,
such
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 as Denmark and Belgium, experienced a slight rise, increasing by less than 1
million
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. Regarding bananas,
Switzerland
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 was by far the leading country in both years, with
sales
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 rocketing from 15
million
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 to 47
million
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. Despite being much lower than
Switzerland
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, the
sales
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 of
UK
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the UK
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 and Belgium grew considerably by more than five times.
By contrast
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, the
sales
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 dropped slightly in Sweden and Denmark, decreasing from about 2
m
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million
 to around 1
m
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million
, with Denmark recording the lowest figure at 0.9
million
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, countries, sales, switzerland, million, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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