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Band 5

You live in a house opposite a park. Every day a man brings large dogs to the park and lets them run free. Write a letter to your local council complaining about the danger. In your letter -say where the park is, -say how often this happens -give a description of the man and the dogs.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
you
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 to complain about the danger in a park. I live in a building located opposite
the
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apply
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Victoria
park
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Park
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,
every
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and every
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 day I
could
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can
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 see the same situation. The issue is that the same man brings his large and
agressive
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aggressive
 dogs to the park every morning and evening and lets them run free without a
lase
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leash
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.
Firstly
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, I want to express my dissatisfaction
about
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with
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this
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 situation. I have made a lot of phone calls to the local authorities, but I
do
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did
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 not
got
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get
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 any
responce
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response
 from them. After I tried to send a message to the
major
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mayor
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 of our town, but
also
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 no answer from him.
Secondly
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, I wrote a letter to the local police station, I gave them photos and
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a briefly
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briefly
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 description of
this
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 man. Once they tried to catch him, but they had no chance as it was
rainy
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raining
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 and too late. I hope you
could
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can
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 solve
this
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 problem
,
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.
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 I will attach photos of
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this
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the
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 dog owner
and
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, and
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 I have some videos of his dogs. I do not recognise what
the
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apply
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breed they are, but both of them are grey
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in color
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color
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colour
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 and
has
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have
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 large tails.
I
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I'm
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 waiting for your quick
responce
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response
. Yours faithfully, Max Maxim

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grammar
Check your grammar and spelling so the meaning is clear.
organization
Put one main idea in each paragraph and use small links to join ideas.
vocabulary
Use simple, common words. Avoid hard words.
content
Be clear about what you want the council to do.
form
The letter has a polite start and end.
content
You name the park and how often the dogs come.
content
You say you tried to contact the council.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public safety
  • unleashed
  • danger to pedestrians
  • local regulations
  • particular concern
  • pose risk
  • hazard to children
  • aggressive behavior
  • council action
  • identifiable features
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