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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed contries should give other types of help to the poor contries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that financial
coorpation
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corporations go
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 to different places.
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is
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it
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 is a commonly held belief
taht
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that
 giving money
not
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is not
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 a solution for the poor
place
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places
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. There is
also
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 an argument that should have other sources to support.
This
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 essay will analyse
this
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 topic from both points of view and express my opinion. On one hand, the
finance
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financial
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 source will help people buy new cars,
house
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houses
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 and food. In other
word
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words
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, the economy was
low
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low,
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that
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which
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 is why they need support from the other government.
In addition
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, some cities had old
school
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schools
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needs
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that needed
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 to be renovated for their kids to
get
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gain
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 knowledge.
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, Saudi
Arabi
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Arabia
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 supports Yamin to build new cities because there is no education, hospitals. On
other
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the other
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 hand, alternative sources
such
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 as food,
cloth
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clothes
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 and oil will
grow
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increase
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 the cost to get better
life
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living
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that if you have enough
money
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money,
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 you will buy anything you want.
Moreover
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, some people need to have
house
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a house
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 to secure themselves and their family.
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, when I was 10 years
old
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old,
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 I
give
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gave
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 some money to one friend
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that
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who
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 is
samlier
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similar
 to the two different
Ministry
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ministries
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. In
conclusio
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conclusion
, there are no easy answers to
this
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 question
,
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;
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 on balance,
however
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, I tend to believe that
make
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making
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 relationships between two countries is a very important part
to
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of
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peaceful
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peace
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.

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task response
Be clear on your view. Say if you agree or not, and how much. Do this in the first part.
structure
Make a small plan in the start. Say what you will talk about in 2 or 3 points.
coherence
Give each idea in its own paragraph. Start with a topic sentence. Use simple connect words to show how ideas go.
language
Check your grammar and spell words. Use plain word forms and make sure sentences are not too long.
content
Use real or simple examples that fit the topic. Keep to the point and explain how the example helps your view.
content
You try to talk about a clear topic.
structure
There are some linking words that show a link between ideas.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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