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Band 4.5

Some people think governments should make university education free, but others think students should pay fees by themselves. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People have different views about
education
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 tuition, one group think that
education
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 should be free,
while
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 the other
think
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thinks
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 the opposite.
While
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 free
education
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 is beneficial for
individual
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individuals
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, I think that
education
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 should be paid
.
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for.
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Firstly
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, free
education
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 means everyone can afford it. Students will be free from loans and could spend the money to improve their
live style
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lifestyle
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for
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, for
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 example, rent a better house or spend
this
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 money
for
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on
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 healthy
habbits
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habits
,
such
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 as gym.
Secondly
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, the society will become equal in the way of having powerful
knwoledge
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knowledge
. Powerful knowledge means the highest level of knowledge that
provided
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is provided
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 only by top
class
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top-class
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of
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universities. Members of low-income families would
finally
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 compete as equals with those who are rich.
However
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, free
education
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 means
taht
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that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should provide all the help and spend billions to support universities, which means that decrease in
distribution
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the distribution
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 of
budget
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the budget
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,
from
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apply
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for example
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 healthcare. Which could lead to
downgrade
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a downgrade
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 in
a
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the
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 quality of medicines and service.
Finally
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, I think with paid
education
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 we can create more opportunities, hire
top class
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top-class
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 teachers with high
salary
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salaries
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 and create
creative
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a creative
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enviroment
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environment
 for students to study.
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, creative places will help students
to
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create creative minds.
Also
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, money from
freems
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Freemasons
 could be
spend
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spent
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for
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on
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 research projects of universities, which could lead to a huge discovery in
a
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the
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 future. In conclusion, it is beneficial for
individual
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individuals
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 to have free
education
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,
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however
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, as
whole
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a whole
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picture
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picture,
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 I think
,
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apply
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 it will harm the budget of the country, and in
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consequence
concequences
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concequences,
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 will harm
the
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apply
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society as the quality of different services will get worse.

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planning
Plan what you will say first. Make one main idea per paragraph and keep to it.
structure
Keep your view clear from the start. Do not mix ideas that show a different view.
development
Give more real and simple examples that fit the point you make.
language
Use easy words and check for any spelling mistake.
coherence
Use linking words to show the order and relation of ideas, like also, but, because, so.
content
You try to present both sides and a final view.
structure
There is a simple outline with 'First', 'Second', 'Finally' and a conclusion.
content
Some sentences show the points you want to make.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • free
  • cost
  • pay
  • government
  • university
  • education
  • funding
  • tax
  • access
  • opportunity
  • equality
  • benefit
  • disadvantage
  • value
  • money
  • debt
  • loan
  • repayment
  • quality
  • price
  • choice
  • option
  • future
  • work
  • economy
  • jobs
  • policy
  • plan
  • balance
  • fairness
  • support
  • scholarship
  • need
  • poor
  • rich
  • merit
  • skill
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