The chart shows the percentage of dependents in total population in 5 countries, compared the number in 2000 and the projection in 2050

The chart shows the percentage of dependents in total population in 5 countries, compared the number in 2000 and the projection in 2050
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows the percentage of dependents in total population in 5 countries, compared the number in 2000 and the projection in 2050
The graph compares the proportion of dependents out of
total
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the total
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populations
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population
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in five Southeast Asian countries and the
world
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average number in 2000 with the forecast figures in 2050.
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, there will be an upward trend in terms of the percentage of dependents in the majority of countries and worldwide.
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the figures for two of them are projected to exceed the
world
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average in 2050, the other three are likely to be lower. In 2000, the
world
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average figure was about 33%, and India had the highest percentage, at around 38%. During
this
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time, the figures for Indonesia and China, which were on a par, were slightly higher than the global average, with about 35%.
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, the remaining countries-Korea and Japan had a lower dependent population than the
world
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average, at 28% and 31% respectively, with Korea the lowest among all countries. In 2050, people who need support are projected to make up over 40% of global citizens, increasing by 7%. Korea and Japan will witness a significant increase, rising sharply to around 49%, which is higher than the
world
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average level.
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, the other three countries’ dependent population is forecast to be fewer than the figure for the
world
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average. Indonesia and China will experience moderate growth, reaching 36% and 38%,
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the figure for India will dramatically drop, falling to 31%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words world with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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