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The charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the average proportions, in
percent
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per cent
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, of
three
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 types of
nutrients
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 in daily meals,
that
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which
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 can lead to an unhealthy diet if eaten too much of.
Overall
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, it is clear from the charts that
whereas
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 breakfast is the most fitted meal, dinner is filled with all
three
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nutrients
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,
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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. Notably, lunch contains a moderate amount of all
three
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nutrients
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. Looking at the
three
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 charts, breakfast placed first as the healthiest out of all meals—14%, 16%, and 16% for
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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, respectively—
,
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apply
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while
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 dinner took the
last
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 place with 43%, 37%, and 23%, respectively.
Furthermore
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, added
sugar
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 constitutes the majority of snacks, but
sodium
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 makes up the minority of it, 42% and 14%, respectively. As for lunch, it seems to have a fair amount of
nutrients
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, with 29%, 26%, and 19% for
sodium
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, saturated fat, and added
sugar
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, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words three, nutrients, sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average percentages
  • nutrients
  • unhealthy
  • meal
  • typical meals
  • categories
  • high percentage
  • distribution
  • patterns
  • trends
  • nutrient-dense
  • data
  • comparison
  • summarize
  • reporting main features
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