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Due to the rise of digital communication methods like social media and instant messaging, face-to-face communication is becoming less common. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Nowadays, thanks to the increasing development of digital
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 methods like social media and instant messaging, exchanging information has
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benefited in various ways.
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, because of
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 trend,
face to face
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communication
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 is believed to become less common.
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advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of
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 phenomenon. First of all, one merit that instant
communication
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 has brought to
people
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's
life
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lives
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 is that it facilitates
socializing
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socialising
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 remotely with just a touch of a button.
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 is because individuals may avoid bad weather like heavy rain or traffic jams when commuting between places in order to attend a formal meeting
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interviews
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interviews,
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 as it is time-saving just to stay at home with
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 internet connection without the fear of not being punctual.
Addtionally
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Additionally
, as there have been various social dating platforms available on the app store, the youth
now are
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 able to find their ideal match without putting
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 effort to meet in person.
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, Google
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 is a prime example where those who got premium memberships can have access to unlimited time per meeting
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 some research indicates that
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 platform has helped
numberous
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numerous
 businesses with saving time for interviews and conference meetings.
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, because of these benefits,
people
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 may no longer be in need
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 direct
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.
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, there are several downsides
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 relying on online social
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networks
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.
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, more and more individuals may become susceptible to anti-social
behaviors
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, resulting in anxiety and even depression.
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, a recent article shows that those who prefer staying at home
texting
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, texting
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 and working remotely are more likely to struggle expressing their own emotions and thoughts to others in real life.
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 leads to having fears of
socializing
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 and overly self-isolating. Another drawback is that fewer
people
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 may enjoy meaningful
converasations
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conversations
 in real life
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this
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 can make them less empathetic to each other because they can choose not to be responsible for their actions. In conclusion, digital
communication
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 platforms may help
people
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 with remote interaction so as to stay
cleer
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clear
 of physical hindrances like bad weather conditions and
congestions
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.
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, there are
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 as mental illnesses. Personally, I hope that governments can come up with effective ways
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to raise
 awareness for real interactions.

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task
In Task Response, answer the question clearly and stay on the topic. State your view and keep ideas that fit the prompt.
coherence
In Coherence and Cohesion, use linking words to move ideas well. Make the flow from one part to the next natural and keep a clear paragraph plan.
grammar
Use simple grammar and short sentences. Check spellings and avoid common misspells.
examples
Give clear examples that back each point. Do not add facts that do not help your view.
structure
Intro and conclusion are present
balance
The essay talks about both sides of the issue
content
It uses some real ideas from life like online talk and weather idea
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