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Band 2.5

Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local foods is environmentally and economically beneficial. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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lot
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 of foods are shipped from other countries .Some individuals think that eating
local
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 cuisines have more benefits towards the environment and the ecosystem.I totally think that eating
food
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 from other countries has a
lot
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 of benefits ,
such
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 as learning about different cultures
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also
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, and knowing more about a variety of types of
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 .
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 , a
lot
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 of individuals learn about different cultures from eating
food
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 from the country and
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 the story behind
this
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 dish .
For instance
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 ,Japanese samurai used to drink
macha
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matcha
 for their body ;
this
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 is one example of many drinks all around the world .
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,we can learn about the different types of
food
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 and weird combinations
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 of people in some places around the universe love to eat watermelon with cheese ,
whereas
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 some countries find it a weird combination. In conclusion, I think it is really important to eat not only local
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 because there are a
lot
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 of pros to it , like learning about different cultures and weird mixes between things.

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task
State your view clearly in the intro and keep it in the main body.
content
Give clear ideas about how local food can help the env and the money of a place; do not only talk about other foods.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas and make your plan easy to follow.
grammar
Use simple, short sentences to avoid mistakes and to help meaning go clear.
examples
Give one or two good, easy examples that relate to everyday life.
structure
Keep a simple plan: intro, 2 body parts, and a clear conclusion.
idea
The essay asks about food from far away and culture.
structure
There is an intro and a ending in place.
grammar
Some simple ideas show you can talk about the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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