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The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.

The map shows the present layout of an post building and plans for its future redevelopment.
The map illustrates the current layout of a post building and proposed transformations for its future redevelopment.
Overall
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, the plan demonstrates substantial structural modifications by providing functional spaces and creating recreational zones. Regarding the present building, the upper central zone features three primary facilities:
kitchen
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a kitchen
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,
canteen
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a canteen
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, and
storeroom
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a storeroom
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 arranged horizontally. A WC is located next to the storeroom in the upper corner.
Conversely
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, four offices are arranged horizontally
also
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 in the bottom central zone. Grass areas occupy simultaneously both the left and right sides of the building.
Finally
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, two main doors provide access: one at the bottom edge and another at the left edge. Turning to the future design, the left and right spaces will undergo significant transformation. On the left, the
area
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 will accommodate with outdoor seating
area
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 in
upper
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the upper
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 section and
indoor
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an indoor
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 seating
area
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 in
lower
Correct article usage
the lower
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 section.
In contrast
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, the right side will feature a coffee machine equipped with a WC
in
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on
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 the edge of
upper
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the upper
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, and a meeting
area
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 will
build
Wrong verb form
be built
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 in the bottom-right side.
Furthermore
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, the kitchen and canteen will be replaced by two offices,
while
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 the storeroom will remain unchanged. The bottom corner entrance will be repositioned to the
center
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centre
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location
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location,
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 where one office is situated on each side.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • map
  • present
  • future
  • plan
  • building
  • post office
  • area
  • space
  • room
  • entrance
  • exit
  • door
  • window
  • car park
  • parking
  • yard
  • road
  • path
  • sign
  • counter
  • desk
  • staff
  • customer
  • service
  • work
  • time
  • crowd
  • line
  • bigger
  • new
  • old
  • safe
  • easy
  • clear
  • open
  • bright
  • design
  • build
  • change
  • improve
  • add
  • extend
  • phase
  • cost
  • traffic
  • noise
  • safety
  • access
  • people
  • move
  • area
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