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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrival in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about international tourist arrival in different parts of the world. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph displays tourism that
visitedvisit
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visited
 5 different continents of the world from 1990 to 2005.
Evidently
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 graphs illustrate that the most popular destination of
travelers
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travellers
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 from 1995 to 2005 was North America, 90.
In contrast
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,
travelers
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travellers
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 started to be interested in Europe
since
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in
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 2000,
thus
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 the graph rose
up
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significantly. The number of visitors to central and eastern Europe started at 30
million
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. 5 years
later
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later,
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 the number grew by
a
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half, resulting in 60
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millions
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million
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of
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tourists.
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, during 1995-
2000
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2000,
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 visitors to Europe increased slightly from 60 to 70
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millions
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million
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. The least popular destinations were South America and Sub-Saharan Africa. It started with approximately
almost
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10
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millions
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million
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 and by 15 years later. They moved up only
almost
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by almost
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a
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half from 10
million
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 to roughly 20
million
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. Comparison between Sub-Saharan Africa and Southeast Asia
,
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had
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common
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a common
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behavior
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 of visitors, the number increasing moderately. 10-20million and 20-almost 40, respectively.(
Perspectively
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Sub saharan
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Sub-Saharan
 grew from 10 to almost 20
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millions
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million
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.
While
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 Southeast Asia grew from 20
million
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 to almost 40
million
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.)

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Vocabulary: Replace the words million, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 4 times.
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