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The bar graph shows types of fictional book sales and their gross earning from 2006 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph shows types of fictional book sales and their gross earning from 2006 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart indicates how much gross
earning
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sales
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from
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earnings from
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 young adults, classics,
mystery
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, romance and sci-fi or fantasy over the period of 4 years from 2006 to 2010 It can be seen that the
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number of
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total income
of
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from
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 fiction book
sales
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 experienced a different trend
in
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this during
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during this
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 time. The
firgures
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figures
 for
mystery
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 and romance
sales
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 for the highest.
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, the
number
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 of young adults, classics and sci-fi or fantasy for
the
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its
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 lowest
in
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at
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this
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 time. In
term
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terms
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 of the
number
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 of
romance
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romances
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, during
period
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the period
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 from 2006 to 2007, there was a significant
encrease
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increase
 between 83,000.00
dollars
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 and 115,000.00
dollars
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.
Then
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, from 2007 to 2008,the
number
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 of
mystery
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sales
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 experienced a decrease from 115,000.00 to over 70,000.00
dollars
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 after
jump
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 to 83,000.00
dollars
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 in 2010.Looking at the data for
mystery
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books
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book
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sales
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, there was an
increased
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by
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of
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 20
million
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dollars
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 from 2006 to 2007 after
decline
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a decline
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 to over 50
million
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dollars
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 in 2010. Regarding these figures, the
number
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 of young
adults
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adults'
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 book
sales
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 almost level off at 30
million
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dollars
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in
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at
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this
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 time. The
number
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 of sci-fi and fantasy
sales
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almost
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remained almost
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 unchanged $18
million
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 in period of 4 years between 2006 and 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, mystery, number, dollars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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