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Th pie charts show the first place Germans and Nigerians go to in order to access the news in a typical week.

Th pie charts show the first place Germans and Nigerians go to in order to access the news in a typical week.
The two pie charts compare how
Germans
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 and Nigerians have
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access to the
news
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 from different
sources
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 during a particular week, in order of priority.
Overall
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, we can observe in Germany and Nigeria, using
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 and
TV
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 is very trendy in comparison with other
sources
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 during that period, respectively. The most popular
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sources
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source
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 for
Germans
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 is the newspaper. Almost
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half of
population
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the population
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follow
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 the
news
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 through newspapers.
TV
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 is the second place for seeking the
news
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 in that country
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 a third of
Germans
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 use
TV
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 for accessing the
news
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. It is reported that
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 around 10% of
people
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 search the
news
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from
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internet
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the internet
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.
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, one in 10
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 of them consider radio
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a source.
Hence
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, just less than 5% receive the
news
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 from other
sources
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.
In contrast
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,
TV
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 is well-known for keeping
people
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 informed about the
news
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 in Nigeria. Approximately
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 60% of Nigerians tend to watch the
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in
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TV
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. Less than a fourth of the
people
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 listen to the radio
news
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 there. More than 10% of them read the newspaper.
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, a tiny proportion of the population access the
news
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 from
internet
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the internet
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, their family and friends. In conclusion,
according to
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 different preferences between
people
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 in two countries, most of the
Germans
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 tend to get their
news
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 from newspapers, and
TV
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news
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 is
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 to be very common among
people
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 in Nigeria.

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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germans, news, sources, tv, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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