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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.

It is believed that
advertisment
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advertising
 is the best way to spread any
pruducts
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products
. Many
coumpanies
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companies
 tend to have significant
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advertising
 to
pursuing
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persuade
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 the
costumers
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customers
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 to buy their products. In my opinion,
the
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apply
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advertising
benefit
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benefits
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 us by giving a lot of advice and choices. First and foremost, there are many people
buy
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who buy
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 the products using the
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advertisments
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advertisements
because they show us the significant benefits of the items
so
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, so
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 we feel that we should buy
it
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them
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immediatly
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immediately
.
In addition
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, it is easy to reach.
This
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 means, if we need to buy some items, we visit
the
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 website
of
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apply
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them
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apply
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and choose the best one that
has
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is
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the
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apply
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best recommended.
For example
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, when I want to buy a
sun glassess
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pair of sunglasses
, I visit the website
that
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apply
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related to the glasses ,
then
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 many
of
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apply
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advertisments
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advertisements
 will appear
after
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. After
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that
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that,
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 I can choose the type and the
color
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colour
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 that I need.
On the other hand
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, some people find
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this
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these
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advertisments
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advertisements
 so boring and
repetition
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repetitive
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so
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that
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 they skip
it
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them
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.
In other words
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, some companies depend on the wild spread so we can see the
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advertisments
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advertisements
in
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apply
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everywhere we go
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such
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, such
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 as trams and parks.
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, my friend
hate
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hates
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 the
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advertisments
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advertisements
 because she
see
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sees
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 them in every place she
go
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goes
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. In conclusion, some people are used to watching the advertising when they want to buy their
needs
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needs,
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while
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the
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others do not find
them
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it
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interest
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interesting
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 and skip watching it .

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task response
Make your view clear in the start and keep it to the end. Say one main idea and prove it.
coherence
Use clear topic sentences for each paragraph and few linking words to join ideas.
language
Check spelling and grammar. Common words like advertisement, products, sunglasses.
examples
Give real life examples and keep them simple, short.
structure
Put intro, body and end in separate paragraphs.
content
There is a view on the topic and some ideas are given.
content
Some examples are used to show points.
structure
The text has an acceptable intro and conclusion.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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