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Writing Samples
Band 4

Some people think that when a person travels into a different culture they should adapt to the local practices and customs. To what extent do you agree?

When
traveller
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a traveller
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 moves to another country
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,
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they should respect and adapt to the new
cultutre
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culture
, many
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. Many
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 people think
this
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 should be
tha
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the
 case,
while
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 others think they should
resume
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retain
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 their cultural identity. I
belevie
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believe
 that a person
need
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needs
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 to show
respection
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respect
 and
adaptation
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adaptability
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towards the new culture and customs,
while
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 keeping
his
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their
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 own
identity
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identity,
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 as
this
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 will show more diversity in the population.  Travelling abroad to a new country will most likely be
accompained
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accompanied
 by many challenges and obstacles
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,
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 including the social, cultural,
language
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and language
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 barriers. As
a
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apply
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one settles
down
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down,
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 they need to be more flexible
into
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in
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 getting to know the history of the place in
adidition
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addition
 to knowing
th
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the
 basics of domestic manners.
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, adapting will help people to avoid being offensive to others or acting with
unappropriate
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inappropriate
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 behaviours. In many professional
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settings
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setting
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setting,
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 it is important to learn about dress codes, which will allow you to dress to fit into society.
On the other hand
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, different cultures may hold
varient
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variant
 views and
belives
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beliefs
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 than the person himself. In
such
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 cases, you are forced to
politly
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politely
 explain it or choose not to
do
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take
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 any action. In
adition
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addition
 to that, a person must watch first
then
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 listen and ask whenever unsure, as
this
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 will help
for avoiding
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avoid
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 being
misunderstod
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misunderstood
.
Moreover
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, learning the basic phrases of the
langauge
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language
 will ease the process of adaptation.  In
conculsion
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conclusion
, travelling in a two-way learning
experiance
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experience
. Indeed
adapting
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, adapting
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 to new traditions is a must where it is needed
yet
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, yet
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 without
fogetting
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forgetting
 your own roots and identity.

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task
State your main idea clearly in the intro and say how much you agree. Then keep this view through the essay.
coherence
Use a clear plan. One idea per paragraph. Use linking words like first, next, also, but, in conclusion.
content
Give more real examples to show your point.
language
Check spell and form words: traveller, culture, respect, adaptation, etc.
structure
End with a strong conclusion that repeats your main idea.
content
You take a view on the topic and keep it to the end.
language
You show some ideas about how to fit in with dress and talk.
structure
You write about both sides of the issue.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adapt
  • adapt to
  • culture
  • customs
  • traditions
  • local
  • respect
  • tolerance
  • observe
  • listen
  • ask
  • learn
  • communicate
  • manners
  • dress
  • food
  • language
  • basic phrases
  • safety
  • laws
  • rights
  • beliefs
  • religion
  • boundaries
  • values
  • identity
  • open-minded
  • polite
  • conflict
  • explain
  • discuss
  • understand
  • fit in
  • get used to
  • exchange
  • two-way
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