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The charts and table below show the percentage of customers choosing different kinds of websites when shopping online and the percentage of customers shopping online for different reasons in two countries in 2012

The charts and table below show the percentage of customers choosing different kinds of websites when shopping online and the percentage of customers shopping online for different reasons in two countries in 2012
The charts and tables give a breakdown of the percentage of customers choosing different kinds of websites when shopping online and the percentage of customers shopping online for different reasons in two countries, namely
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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, in 2012.
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, in pie charts, the figure of both overseas and local websites dominated among other sections in both regions. In general, the table shows that the main reason in both countries was a lower price. In the chart of
Australia
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, the rate of international and local clients was at 64%, which was higher than the figure of New
Zealand
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 (50%). The rate of local clients was the lowest in two regions (12% and 14%).
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, the second place after the mixed clients was the promotion of international buyers at 24% in
Australia
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 and 36% in New
Zealand
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. Regarding, table compares the reasons for choosing a wide range of websites. The main reason in duo regions was lower price at 59% and 51%. In
Australia
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, the second place was taken by the cause of getting more convenient conditions at 23%,
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 it was in third place in the second state at 13%. A large range og clothing was at 16% in
Australia
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 and at 34% in New
Zealand
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. Other reasons have the lowest rate at 2% in two states.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, zealand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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