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The given diagram illustrates how the layout of a public library has changed.

The given diagram illustrates how the layout of a public library has changed.
The diagram shows changes in the public
library
Use synonyms
's interior over the
twenty
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past twenty
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 years.
Overall
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, the map shows that the plan has completely changed compared to the former plan 20 years ago. The diagram shows that building modernised by modern digital
opportinities
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opportunities
 and
servicies
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services
. 20 years ago, when
person
Correct article usage
a person
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enered
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entered
 the
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library
Punctuation problem
library,
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 there
will be
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was
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 an enquiry desk on the right and a reading
book
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bookshelf on
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 the left.
Further
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insede
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inside
 were tables and
chears
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chairs
 for reading and other
porpuses
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purposes
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 in the
center
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centre
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 of
building with the
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the building with
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 adult fiction and non-fiction
books
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 on the side. Other facilities that the
library
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 had
are
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were
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 a place for children’s
books
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,
a
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and a
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computer games area
were
Verb problem
apply
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in the back. Today's
library
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 is
tottaly
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totally
 different. It
welcomes
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is welcomed
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 by
cafe
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a cafe
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 on the right from the
entarence
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entrance
 and
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a computere
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computere
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computer
 room on the left.
Morever
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Moreover
,
central
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the central
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are
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area
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now
Verb problem
is now
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 free,
while
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left
Correct article usage
the left
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 side
replaced
Verb problem
has been replaced
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 with
all
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the
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reference
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all-reference
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books
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 section. Meanwhile, the right central part added
information
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an information
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 desk and
self-servise
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self-service
 machines. A lecture room has recently been added to the
library
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 floor.
In contrast
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, the old floor had tables and chairs to sit in, but now there are two sofas in
children’s
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the children’s
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 function
books
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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