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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary or unpaid work. you would like to do some voluntary or unpaid work at the Museum . write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary unpaid work. in your letter explain why you want to do voluntary work and the museum describe some skills and equality you have that would be useful . give details of when you would be available for work .

Dear
sir
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, I hope
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 letter finds you well
you well
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apply
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. I would like to inform you that I want to join your volunteer work. The aim
to
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 joining
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,
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apply
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 is that I love cultural things. I worked in the gallery two years ago
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 I have good experience in that.
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, I am good
in
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 communication skills and
organization
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organisation
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,
commutation
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communication
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 is
good
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 source to share your values with
other
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others
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 in order to give tour to tourists about the place. Not only
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but
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,
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 I have better knowledge in exhibition designs
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 is helpful in layout, visitor flow,
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and lightening
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lightening
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, I can join on coming Wednesday from noon to night because I have my
full time
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 job
so
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 time is suitable for me. I appreciate your time and assistance. Please feel free to contact me if needed. Your faithfully, Kamal.

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task response
Say one clear reason why you want to do the work. Then note one or two skills that help the job.
coherence and cohesion
Make each new idea in a new paragraph. Start with why you apply, then your skill, then your time you can work. Keep things simple.
tone
Polite tone
content
Shows some fit with the job by giving skill and past work

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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