The charts below give information about workplace injuries in one country in 2018.

The charts below give information about workplace injuries in one country in 2018.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information about workplace injuries in one country in 2018.
The bar chart compares four types of workplace injuries across different
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groups
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in 2018.
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, the highest percentage of elderly people was in all categories ,
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adults had the lowest percentage in 2018. As for education and health, old people (50+) were 40 % and young people (15-24) were 30 % . After that, he proportion of 35-49 years was five times as high as that of 25-34 years (25 % compared to 5 %).
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, all
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groups
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were 10 % higher than each other group (10, 20, 30, 40 %) in the leisure and hospitality
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industry.
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the largest percentage , of 35-49
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group was in manufacturing ,
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both the 25-34 and 50-60
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groups
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were equal at 25 % .
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, the 15-24
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was
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group was
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10 % lower than that of the 25-34 and 50-60
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groups
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(15 % compared to 25 %) . Regarding mining and construction,
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the younger
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(15-24)
was
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5 % higher than that of the elderly (50-60) (40% compared to 35 %) . The 25-34 and 35-49
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groups
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were 15 % and 10 %, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, groups with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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