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Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in the city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In the modern era,
people
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 are using different vehicles to
moving
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move
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 from one place to another,
such
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 as
cars
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 and
bicycles
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.
Whereas
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,
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ought
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think
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 that
cars
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 are the
excellent
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best
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way
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 to commute in urban areas, but others think that
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travel
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travelling
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 by
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bicycles
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bicycle
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are
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is
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 the best
way
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. We will discuss both views and my viewpoint in the upcoming paragraphs.  On the one side, there are numerous benefits to
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travel
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travelling
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 by
car
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 in cities. First and foremost is that
,
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 everybody
have
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has
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hectic
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a hectic
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 schedule and
people
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 like to
travel
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 by
car
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 because
people
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have
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are
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 already tired from working
and
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, and
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 after that, they
donot
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do not
 like to face
difficulty
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the difficulty
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to find
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of finding
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seat
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a seat
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 in public vehicles like buses and trains.
Moreover
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,
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car
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a car
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 saves time because
people
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 can take shortage
way
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 and they can go anywhere and stop at anyplace without any restrictions
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as
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, as
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 well as all facilities are available in the
car
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such
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, such
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 as AC,
musice
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music
 and
protect
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 from rain or bad weather. As a
reault
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result
,
cars
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 are
benficial
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beneficial
to save
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in saving
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 from public
vehicles
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vehicles'
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 rush and time consumed. 
On the other hand
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,
bicycles
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are
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have
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 tremendous benefits.
Firstly
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, it is
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly, it does not produce any type of pollution, so
people
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 will not suffer from any diseases
such
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 as asthma,
lungs issue
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lung issues
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and many more
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as
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, as
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 well as best source of exercise.
For instance
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, a survey was conducted in Australia during 2024, which showed that
people
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 who
travel
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bicycles
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bicycle
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 are less suffer from heart diseases as compared to those who are like to
travel
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 by
car
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.  In
the
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conclusion,
people
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 can not neglect the pros of
cars
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but
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, but
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 I think that
bicycles
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 are
best
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the best
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way
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 to
travel
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 in urban areas because
it
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they
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protects
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protect
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the
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human beings from disease and save the environment from pollution.

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structure
Plan your essay first. Make a small plan with main ideas for cars and bikes. Put the view you agree with in the end.
coherence
Use simple link words to show contrast or add ideas, like but, while, and also. Use them often to connect ideas.
idea
The essay shows a clear idea that bikes can help with health and the planet.
structure
There is a clear end with your own view.
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