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Band 2.5

Although the prices of fuels have greatly increased over the last decade or two, it's argued that further increases in fuel prices are the only way to reduce fuel consumption or lessen pressure on the world's fuel resources. Agree or disagree?

The price of fossil fuels like oil, gas has been significantly increasing day by day.
Government
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The government
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 is doing
this
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 to mitigate the consumption of non-renewable
resources
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.
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However
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However,
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 I believe that there are other possible ways to reduce the use of these
resources
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.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 authorities should educate
public
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the public
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 about
alternate
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alternative
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ways
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sources
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 of
energy
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which
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, which
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includes
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include
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 water and
sun
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solar
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energy
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. There is no denying that more than 75% of industries are still using fossil fuels to meet their
energy
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requirments
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requirements
.
This
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 is because of
lack
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a lack
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 of knowledge about
alternate
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alternative
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 ways.
Government
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The government
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 should help teach the general public about
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the benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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 of installing renewable
energy
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 plants.
Along with
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 the knowledge session, support could be provided to install more natural
energy
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resources
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.
This
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 will allow
energy
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 users to switch their
resources
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.
This
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 action will not only save money but
also
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 help to
built
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build
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sustainable
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a sustainable
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 environment. The transition from fossil fuel to traditional
resources
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 will go smoothly with the help of
system
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the system
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.
For
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instance
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instance,
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 the politician should support and fund the companies which are supporting renewable
energy
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 sources.
To conclude
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, by educating and installing
the
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apply
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renewable
energy
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 sources, authorities can reduce the burden on non-renewable
energy
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 sources.
Along with
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this
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, it is
cheaper
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a cheaper
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 option for users. Eventually, it will help to maintain sustainability without compromising the needs of
present
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the present
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 generation.

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task response
Make your view clear in the first paragraph and say more about why you think other ways exist.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words to show how one idea leads to the next.
task response
Give more real and specific examples to back each point.
language
Check grammar and spell common words to avoid errors that slow the reader.
content
You show a clear aim to cut the use of non-renewable fuels.
structure
There is a plan to educate people and to fund renewables.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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