THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE RESIDENTIAL WATER USE IN 1988 AND 2008.

THE CHARTS BELOW SHOW THE RESIDENTIAL WATER USE IN 1988 AND 2008.
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The given pie charts compare the distribution of residential water use in a particular country over a 20-year period (from 1988 to 2008).
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, washing accounted
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highest trend with 25% in the initial year,
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in 2008, kitchen demonstrated the highest tendency. Starting
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1988, washing was the biggest consumer, accounting for 25% of the total,
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the lowest was the kitchen with about 15%. Followed by details, the bathroom was the second highest, at 22%.
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, the garden and toilets demonstrated a little similar rates, 20% and 18%.
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, kitchen experienced the most dramatic growth, rising by 14 percentage points to reach 29%, and becoming the largest category in the next 20 years. The next category was bathroom, making up 28%
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meanwhile, washing saw a decline, dropping from 29% to 22% in 2008.
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what is shown, toilets
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went down, decreasing by only 4%, demonstrating 14%.
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, the garden decreased dramatically, from 20% to only 7%, making it the smallest category.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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