Some people think that cars are the best way to travel in the city, while others think that bicycle is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Many consider that the best method to
travel
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to the city is by a vehicle,
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others consider cycling
as
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a better approach. Those
that
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consider travelling by
car
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consider
this
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method as it is the fastest way to reach the city and more convenient.
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, cycling fanatics believe
this
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way for its health
benefits
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.
Firstly
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, the ability to
travel
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by
car
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helps
alot
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a lot
of people to reach their destination faster,
this
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is attributed to
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the conveniency
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conveniency
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convenience
they provide.
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, many workers opt to purchase cars as it helps them reach the city very fast, for many an
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drive is better than 2 hours cycling
period
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.
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, many who choose
this
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approach do not depend on any one and are able to move at whatever time they choose.To illustrate, many
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work on
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jobs
require
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to be at the office at exact times and are able to leave at whatever time they knock off.
On the other hand
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, cycling has better health
benefits
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.The activity helps prevent vascular diseases caused by
lack
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a lack
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of
excercises
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exercise
.
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, mental and physical health
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occur when one cycles.Cycling helps with mental resilience and clarity,
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this
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which
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helps with focus at work. Many organisations in many countries
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, like
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Australia
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Australia,
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have
setup
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shower rooms, where one can clean up after cycling, making it
more
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easier to perform
this
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routine. In conclusion, there are
benefits
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to
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travel
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travelling
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by
car
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as well as
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there are
benefits
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to
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travel
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travelling
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by Bicycle. I feel that there are more
benefits
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to
ride
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riding
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a bicycle than there are to
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travel
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travelling
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by
car
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.

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task response
Make a clear plan in the intro: say you will discuss two views and give your own view at the end.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words to connect ideas between sentences and paragraphs (for example, firstly, however, in addition).
grammar vocabulary
Check grammar and spelling: 'alot' -> 'a lot', 'conveniency' -> 'convenience', 'to travel by Bicycle' -> 'to travel by bicycle'.
task response
Give more precise examples or data to back up points.
task response
The essay discusses both views and gives a clear own position.
coherence
Two main ideas are used: time and health.
organization
It uses a plan with start, middle, and end.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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