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Some think that governments should provide free public transport for all citizens, while others believe people should pay for this service. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is often argued that public transportation should be available for all residents as a means of free commuting,
while
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 others claim that
such
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 service should be paid
.
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Although
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 free public
transport
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 has already been available in some regions for certain groups of
people
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, I believe that almost all citizens need to pay for
use
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the use
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 of
services
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the services
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. On the one hand, the governments' universal goal is to provide accessible and comfortable facilities to their society. One of the most used services is public
transport
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 ,
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 as buses and
metro
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the metro
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. Nowadays, many countries have already been providing free rides for vulnerable groups of citizens,
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, for old
people
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, persons with disabilities and kids under a certain age.
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, assisting citizens with one of the basic needs is the priority of many nations.
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, public
transport
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 requires good amounts of funding that cannot be fully covered without passengers' purchases or with only taxes. By paying for trips,
people
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 do not just donate money to the government, but
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 directly support the operations of the
transport
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, salaries of workers or any reconstruction and repairing works.
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, since the cost of tickets for public
transport
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 is not usually high or expensive, many employed
people
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 may afford
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 a payment.
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, in my conclusion, despite that free public
transport
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 provides its benefits to society, I am convinced that without additional cash assistance, there is no guarantee that public transportation can work as comfortably as it can .

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structure
Make the task clear. Start with one line that you think most people should pay for travel, then add the two sides with reason, and end with a clear view.
coherence
Put a clear plan in your essay. Use short links to show how ideas stay together.
content
Give more real reason and a small example to back each idea.
grammar
Check grammar and word use. Use 'the government' for one group, or 'governments' for more than one.
conclusion
End with a clear line of your view. Do not end with a new idea.
focus
You show both sides and you give a view.
structure
You use 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' to link ideas.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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