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Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed. What is the reason for doing this? Enhance future life style Is this a negative or positive development?

In
this
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comtemporary
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contemporary
 scenario, undoubtedly, there is a huge
competition
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 in each and every field.
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,
In
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 order to succeed,
today
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parents
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 are
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 strict
to
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 their
children
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 to reach the goal. In my opinion,
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 technology and fierce
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is
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 the main
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causes
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 of it
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as
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 well as
it
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is negative trend for
children
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.
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 the advancement in the field of technology,
children
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often
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are often
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 negatively
effected
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affected
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 by innovation.
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, it can be clearly seen that
children
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 nowadays are extremely
intrested
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interested
with
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 technical gadgets and varied social media
application
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applications
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.
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, they distract from their goals
,
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and spend numerous hours
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 with devices.
As a result
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,
parents
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 are forced to behave strictly with their
children
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.
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,
initially
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, adolescents use mobile
phone
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phones
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 for entertainment, but later on, they become
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habituated
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of
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to
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it
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them
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 and waste their precious time
to
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surfing the internet and other social media applications unnecessarily. So, because of
this
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phenomena
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phenomenon
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,
parintal guidence
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parental guidance
 and strictness
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require
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 to indicate the right path to the youths.
Although
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,
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due to
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 the ruthless
competition
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 in every aspect of life,
children
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 are usually pushed hard by
parents
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 to do better
from
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 others, no matter
weather
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whether
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 in education or sports.
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, the trend of
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 nourishment by
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guardians
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sometime
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sometimes
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 harmful for
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offspring
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, the primary reason
of
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for
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it
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this
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 is deteriorating mental and physical health. To explain it,
due to
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parents's
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parents'
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 strict rules , young people generally
loose
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lose
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 the opportunity to
persue
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pursue
 their target in which they have
the
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an
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 interest,
such
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 as singing, dancing, painting, etc.
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unpleasantly
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unpleasantly,
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 they are helpless to do
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according
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so according
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 to their
parents
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, and struggle with mental pressure and physical stress.
For instance
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, nowadays,
parents
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 send their
children
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 to
tution
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tuition
 directly from school and
then
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 force them
for
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to
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extra study
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study extra
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 at home.
Thus
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, youngsters do not get enough time to play and do any physical exercise, which not only
effect
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 their physical health but
also
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social
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their social
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 life, as they hardly get a chance to me others. In conclusion, intense
competition
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 in every field and
negative
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the negative
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 impact of modern technology are the main
cause
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causes
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 of it
and
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, and
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 it has diverse
effect
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effects
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 on
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children
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children's
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life
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lives
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.

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structure
Put the main idea in one place and give a clear end to your essay.
coherence
Use one idea in one paragraph and link ideas with small words like 'and', 'but', 'so'.
language
Use words that are easy and check spell of key words.
content
You show that too much push from parents can hurt kids.
content
You try to use examples to show your point.
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