Many people believe that studying abroad provides better educational and career opportunities, while others argue that it is better to pursue higher education in one’s home country. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Studying abroad is an argument topic, so some people believe that studying abroad is better than studying at local universities.
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some hold an opinion that opposes it. In
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I will discuss both arguments, and I will give my opinion. In the matter of studying abroad, in some countries it is a huge oppurtnity.
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, Australian universities are well known for their high
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level. After completing
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university, there are many places to work
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especially
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is wanting immigrants. So
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a
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like
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it is a good chance to have a bright future.
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, studying abroad at
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will give you a better future even in your own
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.
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, studying abroad will make you more responsible. You will probably pay rent and bills, so that will teach you to be more mature in your life choices.
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, claiming a higher education in your home
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will save you from feeling homesick. Many people do not know how to deal with homesickness, so they spend a lot of money and
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return home without completing
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university.
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, studying in your
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will give
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chance to make relationships
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will find
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helpful
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searching for jobs.
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, you will have your
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support for the whole time. If anything bad occurs with the university or with other
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they will help immediately. In conclusion, it is hard to decide between both of the oppositions, but in my opinion, I find studying abroad will give you a bright future for the job options you will get there.
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, it is my dream to study abroad, so that's why I will support the idea of going abroad.

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structure
Make a clear plan. Start with a brief view of both sides, then state your own opinion, and finish with a short closing line.
language
Use simple words and short sentences. Check spelling and form to keep your meaning clear.
content
Give more exact proof. Use real facts or clear examples to back up each point.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go together, like 'also', 'but', 'therefore', and 'in addition.'
content
You present both sides of the issue.
tone
You include a personal wish at the end, which can show your view.
structure
The essay uses organizers like 'On the other hand' to show an opposite view.

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