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The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.

The graph below shows information about the total oil consumption of four major consumers from 2009 to 2030.
The presented line graph shows the information about total
oil
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 consumption in four different major consumers,
such
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 as the USA,
China
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, Western Europe and Japan and
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East from 2009 to 2030. Units are calculated in
million
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 barrels per
day
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that, among all, in
beginning
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the beginning
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, the United States
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along
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, along
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 with other Western European and Japanese will decrease their
oil
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 consumption by 2030.
In contrast
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,
China
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 and
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Middle
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the Middle
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 East both are expected to increase their demand for
oil
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.
However
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, the United States will still remain on top
as
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apply
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compared to others.
Thier
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Their
 total
oil
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utilization
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utilisation
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 was evaluated at approximately 10
million
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 barrels per
day
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 in 2015
and
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, and
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 it is expected to drop to about 4
million
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barrel
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barrels
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/
day
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 by the end of 2030.
Furthermore
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, Western Europe and Japan will continue their linear decline
starting
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, starting
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 at 4
million
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 barriers in 2009 and falling
at
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to
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 approximately 2
million
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 in 2030.
China
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 and the
Middle
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 East are expected to follow the opposite trend. To be more accurate, their total usage will keep rising, reaching almost 4 and 3
million
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 barriers per
day
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 in 2025, respectively. In the next five years, the total
oil
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 usage is expected to drop minimally in
China
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,
while
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 in the
Middle
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 East, the consumption will
overcome
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surpass
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 4
million
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barriers
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barrels
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, china, middle, million, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • oil
  • consumption
  • total
  • use
  • country
  • year
  • 2009
  • 2030
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • go up
  • fall
  • decrease
  • drop
  • stay the same
  • remain
  • high
  • highest
  • low
  • lowest
  • big
  • large
  • small
  • difference
  • gap
  • trend
  • pattern
  • compare
  • compared with
  • in comparison with
  • lead
  • leader
  • by
  • in
  • from
  • to
  • by 2030
  • in 2009
  • more
  • most
  • less
  • least
  • upward
  • downward
  • steady
  • stable
  • peak
  • level off
  • economy
  • population
  • policy
  • technology
  • price
  • supply
  • environment
  • future
  • coming years
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