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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environments, such as South Pole. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

These days, there are more possibilities for researchers and visitors to go to faraway natural
places
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such
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 as
Antarctica
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.
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 is good because
scientists
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 can discover new ways of life, and for
tourists
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, it is a new experience getting to know unusual environments.
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, there are cons
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 as the special equipment that specialists need, and the problem of crowding of
tourists
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 in virgin
areas
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 the negative impact on the environment.
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 essay will cover whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Turning to the pros, it is really an excellent opportunity for
scientists
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 to travel to the South Pole to investigate the area and discover new species of organisms and study climate change. Argentina has a base in
Antarctica
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 where
scientists
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 can research fossils, different animals that live there, and even climatologists can study the weather. For
tourists
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, it is a new experience to get to know remote
areas
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 and
places
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 of difficult access. About the drawbacks, the South Pole is not a good place to stay. It is necessary to have special training and
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 special gear to overcome the difficulties of the area. Most of the
scientists
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 who travel to
Antarctica
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 have military training and equipment
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 not usual in regular
places
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. Another disadvantage is that
Antarctica
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 is a virgin area
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it is not prepared with proper infrastructure to receive visitors;
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, the presence of people in these
areas
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 can affect the habitat of the species established there and produce a negative impact on the environment.
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 the options to travel to remote
areas
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 for scientific and tourist purposes, it is a good opportunity for discoveries and new experiences , getting to know unusual
places
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.
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, despite the necessity of training and special equipment, even the negative impact on the environment and the lack of infrastructure to receive
tourists
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, I strongly believe that the advantages do not outweigh the disadvantages.

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task
Work on making your main idea clear in the first paragraph. State your view and the plan of the essay.
task
Give more details and simple examples to back up each point.
structure
Improve how you link ideas between paragraphs with simple joining words.
grammar
Check grammar and word order to be easy to read.
content
You show a clear view at the end.
structure
You use a real plan with intro, body, and conclusion.
content
You talk about both sides in a fair way.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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