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The chart below shows the Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012

The chart below shows the Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012
The line graph shows exports of Australia to four countries (Japan,
US
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the US
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, China,
India
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and India
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) in per cent between 1990 and 2012
Overall
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, Australia experienced different trends in the time period.
While
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export
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exports
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 to China and India
had
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apply
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an
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apply
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increase
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increased
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,
the number
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exports
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of
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to
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 Japan and
US
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the US
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 decreased. Starting at 3% in 1990,
export
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exports
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 to China had a great increase,
sharping to
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reaching
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 28% in 2012. Regarding
,
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apply
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 India's import, which started at 2% in 1990, experienced a steady increase, and reached the highest result of 8% in 2008.
Then
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, the
figure
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 began to
fell
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fall
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 and finished at 5% in 2012.
By contrast
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, Japan experienced
decrease
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a decrease
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. Starting at 25% in 1990,
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figure
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the figure
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gad
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had
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 a huge gradual decrease to 17% in 2006.
Then
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, it quickly grew
up
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apply
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to 20% in  2008. After that, it
keep
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kept
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 decreasing again and finished at 17% in 2012. At the same time,
US
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the US
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also
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 had a
fluctuated
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fluctuating
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 decrease. The
figure
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 started at 12% in 1990, and
keep
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has kept
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 falling.
Then
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,
number
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the number
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 grew to 13% between 1996 and 2000, and kept plunging again. The
figure
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 finished at 5 and 6% in 2011 and 2012, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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