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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams illustrate how the central
library
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 has changed over the past 20 years.
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, there are still four rooms in the
library
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, but their functions
were
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have
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 changed.
In addition
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, the
outfit
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layout
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 of the hall was shifted and the facilities were upgraded. In the lobby, the tables & chairs which
located
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were located
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 at the
central
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centre
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 of the
library
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 were
canceled
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cancelled
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.
At
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On
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 the two sides of the
library
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, they were used to place the adult fiction and non-fiction
books
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. Now,
at
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on
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 the left
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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side, all reference
books
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 were placed. And
at
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on
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 the right
of
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side of
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 the
side
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library
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, the
library
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 manager
kelp
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kept
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 a small area for the adult fiction
books
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, and added some new service facilities like
information
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an information
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 desk and three self-service machines, which they put
information
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the information
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 desk
at
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in
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 the middle. The four
room
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, which
located
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are located
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 at the four corners of the
library
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all
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, all
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 got
new
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their new utilisation. At the top left corner of the diagram, the
room
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 was used for CDs, videos,
computer
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and computer
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 games. Now it
changed
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has changed
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 to a reading
room
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 for children with two sofas diagonally arranged. The
stuff
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staff
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 can tell the children fiction stories. At the top right corner of the map, the children’s
books
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 area
were
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was
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 changed
by
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to
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lecture
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a lecture
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room
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. At the left of the entrance, the reading
room
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, which showed newspapers &
magazines
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magazines,
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 changed to a computer
room
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. At the right of the entrance, the enquiry desk
which
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, which
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 offered tickets, book returns
now
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, changed to a café.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, books, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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