You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. In your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course. say how much cooking you have done since the course. suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer. Write at lease 150 words.

Dear Sir, I am writing
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letter to provide feedback about the
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that I completed
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your school during the
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summer
voccations
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vacation
. My name is Amarpreet Singh and I have completed a full-time cooking
course
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which included Italian and
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Chinese cuisines
.
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the
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fee was a bit exorbitant, the experience and knowledge given by highly trained chefs
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excellent. During my
enrollement
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enrollment
, the teachers not only
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on
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theory but
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focus
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on practical sessions. After completing
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course
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, I was
excell
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excellent
in making all
kind
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of Italian and
Chinnese
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Chinese
dishes
effeciently
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efficiently
. Apart from that,
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course
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has helped me to get a job in high
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restaurant with
handsome
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a handsome
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salary. I have been cooking at
restaurant
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a restaurant
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for the
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five months, and
ocassionally
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occasionally
I cook for my friends too, especially on weekends. I would like to make some suggestions about the
course
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.
While
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this
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course
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is highly effective, I would request you to add some
asain cusines
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Asian cuisines
,
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would not only
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students' vision but
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increase career opportunities. I would really appreciate the knowledge your school has provided, and I hope you will consider my suggestions. Yours sincerely, Amarpreet Singh.

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You show the main idea and give a real plan for a new course.
greeting/closing
You use a good opening 'Dear Sir' and close 'Yours sincerely'.
idea
You tell how the course helps you get a job.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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