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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisos where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accomodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisos where relevant.
The given graph compares the
percentage
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 of
households
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 that either live in their own
home
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 or in a rental
accommodation
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 in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the two sectors followed opposite trends;
while
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 the
percentage
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 of renting the
accommodation
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 decreased over time, the number of
households
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 owning
accommodation
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 increased.
However
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,
at the end
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 of the given period, the
home
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 ownership did not reach the peak
percentage
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 of renting
accommodation
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 at its peak.
To begin
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 with, in the initial years, it was common among
households
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 to rent a
home
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, as the figure was accounted for just under 80%, in comparison to
home
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 ownership, which was at over 20%. In the continuing years, as the
percentage
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 of buying a
home
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 started to experience a slight growth, increasing to 30%,
however
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, the number of people renting
accommodation
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 decreased below 70%. In 1961,
while
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 the
percentage
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 of household owners doubled to 40%, compared to 1918, the popularity of renting
accommodation
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 was still decreasing (60%). In 1971, the figures showed similar trends at 50%. Later, a significant number of
households
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 tend to own accomodation more (60%),
in contrast
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 to renting a
home
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 (40%), esspecially in 2001, when the
percentage
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 of
home
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 ownership experienced a significant growth and reached 70%,
whereas
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 the
home
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 renting dropped to about 30% declining to about 50% from the 1918.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households, home, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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