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The graph and chart below give information on the average daily and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.

The graph and chart below give information on the average daily and minimum temperatures in degrees Celsius (°C) and the average number of days with rainfall each month for two Australian cities.
The line graph illustrates daily high and low temperatures in degrees Celsius for
Brisbane
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 and
Canberra
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,
while
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 the bar chart depicts the average number of
days
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 with rainfall per month in each city.
Overall
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, it is obvious that
Brisbane
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's minimum and maximum temperatures were higher than those in
Canberra
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 in general.
Additionally
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, it is
also
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 notable that both areas showed a similar pattern in temperature changes. In terms of rainfall,
although
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Brisbane
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 experienced more rainy
days
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 on average, the trends between the months of April and September were opposite. Looking at the line graph closely, it can be seen that in February, the average daily maximum temperature in
Brisbane
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 reached its highest point, at 30 degrees Celsius. Meanwhile,
Canberra
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's average daily maximum temperature rose steadily from December to February, peaking at 27 °C.
By contrast
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, July saw a decline in the lowest temperatures in
Brisbane
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 and nearly 1 °C in
Canberra
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. As can be demonstrated by the bar chart, it is apparent that the total number of rainy
days
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 in
Brisbane
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 rose gradually from December to April, hitting a peak at 14
days
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 in both February and March.
Likewise
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, the highest number of
days
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 with rainfall in
Canberra
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 remained stable, at 10
days
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 with drizzle every month.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words brisbane, canberra, days with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average daily maximum
  • average daily minimum
  • rainfall
  • degrees Celsius (°C)
  • anomalies
  • trends
  • geographic location
  • climate zones
  • seasonal changes
  • data representation
  • comparison
  • temperature range
  • weather patterns
  • statistical analysis
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