The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pie charts provide information about online
sales
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for retail sectors in Canada
which
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, which
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are varied
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between the
year
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years
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2005 and 2010 From the 2005
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chart
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chart,
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there are 4 sections providing
sales
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from each retail
sectors
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sector
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which
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, which
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are Electronics and Appliance, Food and Beverage,
Home
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furnishings and
Video
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Games
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. Provided with the
detail
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details
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from the
chart
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, Electronic and Appliance has the highest
sales
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with
it
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section having 35
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percent
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per cent
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making
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, making
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them
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it
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the highest
sales
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percentage
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, followed by
Home
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Furnishing with 25
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percent
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per cent
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, Food and Beverage with 22
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percent
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per cent
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and ranked
last
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,
Video
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games
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with 18
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percent
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per cent
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. Unlike the 2005
chart
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, the 2010
chart
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had a dramatic change in
it
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sales
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,
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.
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Electronic and Appliance
which
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ranked first in the 2005
chart
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now
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fall
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fell
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to second
with
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, with
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it
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its
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sale
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sales
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lost by 5
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percent
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per cent
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(30
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percent
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per cent
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)
,
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.
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Food and Beverage had a
rose
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in
sales
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percentage
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with
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, with
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32
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percent
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per cent
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, making
them
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it
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the highest
sales
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percentage
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in all of the 4 sections.
Lastly
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,
Video
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Games
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and
Home
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Furnishings have no change in ranking, their
sales
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percentage
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have
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changed,
Increasing
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increasing
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by 5
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percent
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per cent
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Video
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. Video
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Games
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has 23
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percent
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of
sales
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percentage
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and dropping by 10
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percent
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per cent
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Home
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, Home
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furnishings
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Furnishings
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now has only 15
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percent
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per cent
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of the
sales
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percentage
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, chart, home, video, games, percent, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • accounted for
  • notable decrease
  • significant increase
  • steady growth
  • modest increase
  • sharp decline
  • percentage of online sales
  • retail sectors
  • pie charts
  • comparison
  • over the five-year period
  • largest share
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