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Some people saay that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so commin that we no linger pa40y attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Advertising has
becom
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become
 an essential strategy to maximise
sells
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sales
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 during the
last
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 40 years.
While
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 it is still being used by a wide
rang
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range
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 of business parties, some people argue that it has no impact anymore.
This
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 essay will examine both sides
an
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and
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 give my opinion. On one hand, the majority of
population
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the population
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beleives
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believes
 that advertising is the ideal way to grow
up
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apply
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fast for many
reasonse
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reasons
.
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 with , advertising is
conveniant
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convenient
 for both
company
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the company
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 and
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the customar
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customar
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customer
. To illustrate, it can be shown everywhere and
everytime
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every time
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 with less effort.
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, in the garden, streets, and subway. Another cause is advertising
explore
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exploring
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 what
servies
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services
is
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firms
performing
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perform
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 or what type of
sells
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sales
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 it is interested in. To clarify, even citizens who live in
countryside
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the countryside
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 and
others
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other
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 cities can
a
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apply
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have
informaion
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information
 about the
product
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. These reasons indicate why advertising
still
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is still
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 the
corne stone
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cornerstone
 of company success even these days.
On the other hand
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, some
human
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humans
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claims
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claim
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 that
advetising
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advertising
 is wasting money and time because of many factors. First of all,
peaple
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people
 lost trust
of
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in
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advertised
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the advertised
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product
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. To make it
clair
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clear
, because of
increasing
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the increasing
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 number of
faked
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fake
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product
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products
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,
personse
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people
 have a negative attitude about advertising.
Secondly
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,
usualy
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usually
 advertised items
has
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have
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 less quality than what the
customar
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customer
expect
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expects
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. Sometimes the
product
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deteils
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details
unmatch
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match
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 the real
product
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.
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, the quality, size and the components made
off
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of
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. These are the main
elemnts
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elements
 that
explaine whay
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explain why
 advertising has
becom
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become
 helpless. There are
few
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a few
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 reasons
indicate
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that indicate
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 advertising has less impact than before.
However
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, from my
perspective
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point
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 of view, I
beleive
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believe
 it is the
idesl
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ideal
 strategy of expanding businesses. The
conveniant
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convenience
, availability of
product
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info
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information
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 are the main
factor
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factors
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 which support my opinion.

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structure
Plan a clear essay: start with a simple intro that states your view, then one paragraph for each side, and finish with a short conclusion that repeats your view.
organization
In the intro, make a clear statement of your position.
content
In each body paragraph, state one main idea and support it with a simple example.
cohesion
Use linking words to show the flow from one idea to the next.
accuracy
Check spellings and grammar to avoid errors that can hide meaning.
examples
Choose examples that closely fit the point you make and keep sentences short and clear.
content
The essay tries to cover both views and gives an opinion.
examples
Some real examples are used to back points.
coherence
There is an attempt to keep to the topic of advertising.
tone
The writer uses simple language and repeats key words like advertising.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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