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Band 2.5

Some people think that housing facilities should be built in the vacant areas of cities and towns, while others believe that parks should be set instead. Planting trees is very important for the environment. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is a view that many
people
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 consider that housing
facilities
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 should be
replace
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replaced
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to
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with
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 vacant
areas
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 of
city
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cities and
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 towns,
while
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 others think
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instead
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that instead
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 of
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this
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this,
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 there should be built
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apply
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parks
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, and
also
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 planting trees can be
crucial
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a crucial
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 part
for
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of
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environment
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the environment
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. From my personal
statement
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statement,
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i
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I
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 believe
to
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that there must be set up
parks
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 and other attractions for children's happiness. On the one hand, many
people
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 say that to having a vacant
areas
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 for housing
facilities
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 can be good option, as it can
also
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 provide some benefits and convenience for rezidences,
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 as
instead
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 of placing everytheir furnitures or other
facilities
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 only one house can create some issues, like living condition will be turned to cramped environment, and other some problems can cause to
this
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 vacant
areas
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 are suitable for constructions like
build
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building
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 houses
by
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apply
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without
demolish
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demolishing
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 or
relocate
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relocating
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exisiting
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existing
 buildings.
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, there will be
improvments
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improvements
 in better planning opportunities, like Empty
areas
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 give urban planners the chance to design modern housing with proper infrastructure,
such
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 as roads,
parks
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, and public services.
In addition
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, all of
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this
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these
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 properties brings benefits.
On the other hand
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,
There
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there
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 can be seen some problems related to
this
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 option.
many
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Many
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people
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 argue in
this
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 prescription about
to build
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building
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parks
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,
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apply
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 or other
facilities
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instead
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 of vacant
areas
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.
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instead
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Instead
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 of
this
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people
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, people
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 consider that.

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Advice
Be clear in what you think. Say if you agree or not and why.
Structure
Plan the essay: intro, two ideas, end.
Content
Give one or two simple reasons and a short example from life.
Language
Fix word use and spell. Use common, simple words.
Content
You talk about parks and trees.
Approach
You try to cover both sides of the idea.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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