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The table below shows the number of motor vehicles per 1000 inhabitans in eight countries in 1990 and 2000

The table below shows the number of motor vehicles per 1000 inhabitans in eight countries in 1990 and 2000
The table chart compares how many motor vehicles were per 1000
person
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people
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 in 8 different countries (Bahamas, Brazil, Cambodia, Chile, Jordan, Luxembourg, New Zealand, Romania) in
years
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the years
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 1990 and 2000.
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, 8 countries
expeienced
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experienced
 different trends during
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the period
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.
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 the
number
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 in Brazil, Jordan, Luxembourg and Romania had considerable growth, Chile, New Zealand and Cambodia had
lower
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number
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 of changes. At the same time Bahamas experienced a decrease. As the graph shows, Chile and Romania's figures started at the same
number
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 in 1990, which is 68.
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 experienced
increase
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 in both regions, and became 88 and 8012 in 2000, respectively. Regarding
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the Luxembourg and New
Zealands'
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Zealand'
 figure, their data started at 548 and 531 in 1990, which became 728 and 557 in 2000.
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 of transport per 1000 person in Jordan and Brazil, which started at 50 and 55 in 1990, had a considerable growth, rocketing
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 157 and 13580 in 2000, respectively.
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, the figure in
Bahamas
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the Bahamas
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, which was 235, declined to 187. Regarding
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 the
number
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 in Cambodia, which was the lowest (1), experienced no change even after 10 years, finishing the figure at 1 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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