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Many people join the distance-learning programs (study, learning material, post, Tv, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefits as attending college or university does. DO you agree or disagree?

The question of distance learning or online programs has taken on a new significance since COVID. Let me describe the positive and negative impacts of that type of study. On the one hand, students can apply to a lot of programs without geographical limitations.
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 argument is really important for people who cannot afford to live abroad.
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, these students can choose several programs at the same time and mix them with the main program.
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, I think it's an excellent opportunity for small and poor countries, as they lack highly qualified universities.
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, the offline type of studying
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 has a strong social impact, especially for young students. In my opinion, it is easier to keep focus when you are face-to-face with your professor than when you deal with a computer.
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, the real community with people who can speak with you in real life is a great bonus. In my
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 the ideal solution is to mix
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 type of education.
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, to choose the offline university for the main academic programme and add the additional professional courses or a master's degree in another country.

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State your main view in the intro so the reader knows your stance from the start.
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Keep one big idea per paragraph and give a short example for each.
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End with a short line that restates your view.
coherence
Use clear link words to show how ideas fit together.
coherence
Break long sentences to help the reader see the point more clearly.
content
The text shows a plan to use both online and offline study.
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There is good use of contrast to show different ideas.
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The idea that distance learning can help small or poor countries is present.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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