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The chart below shows the resons why people travel to eork by bicyle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the resons why people travel to eork by bicyle or by car. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts illustrate the reasons
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people
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's choice in driving or cycling to
work
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.
Overall
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, most
people
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 prefer
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bicycles
 because of their health and environmental benefits,
while
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people
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 who drive to
work
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 choose it for its
convinence
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convenience
 and speed of
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travel. As is shown by the graphs, 30% of
people
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 cycle to
work
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due to
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 its comfort
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 the same percentage of
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commuters
 prefer it as it is environmentally-friendly. Quarter
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of
people
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 cycle to get
their
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 workplace
beacause
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because
 of its parking
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availability
, another 12% and 13% of
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commuters
 use it for its cost-effectiveness and quickness
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. Regarding the reasons for driving to
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, 40%
people
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 consider cars more comfortable,
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other
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 21%
is
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 influenced by the distance between their house and workplace. The same proportion of
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, 14% prefer driving as it is fast and they need to take their things to
work
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. Only 11% of
people
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 drive to
work
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due to
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 its safety and security features.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, work with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Commute
  • Cyclists
  • Motorists
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Caloric expenditure
  • Carbon footprint
  • Infrastructure
  • Accessibility
  • Traffic congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Punctuality
  • Fuel efficiency
  • Operational costs
  • Commuting trends
  • Safety gear
  • Public transport integration
  • Bike lanes
  • Peak hours
  • Weather patterns
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