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The bar chart below shows the production of the world's oil in OPEC and Non-OPEC countries. Write a short report for university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The bar chart below shows the production of the world's oil in OPEC and Non-OPEC countries. Write a short report for university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The bar chart provides data regarding the production
oil
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of oil
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 in the world by
non-
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OPEC
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 and
OPEC
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countries
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 between 1980 and 2020. The unit of measurement is in million barrels.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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OPEC
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 Middle East increased the production of oil by the
end
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 of the
period
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,
whereas
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non-
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OPEC
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 nations had the opposite
thrend
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trend
. It is
also
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 evident that the
total world's
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world's total
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 productivity rose towards the
end
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 of the duration. Focusing first on the
OPEC
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 Middle East
countries
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,
althouhg
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although
 between 1980 and 2000, they released approximately 2
daily
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million daily
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, in 2000-2010, the figure increased to approximately 8
.
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million.
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 After that, it hit a peak of nearly 17 by the
end
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 of the
period
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. Turning to the
countries
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 with the decreasing
trent
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trend
, in the initial
period
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, the figure for the
non-
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OPEC
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countries
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 stood at roughly 9.5, which almost halved by 2000-2010. Notably, other
OPEC
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countries
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 started to
produse
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produce
 oil only between 2000 and 2010, at approximately 6.5 per day, similar to the
non-
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OPEC
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 group.
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, by the
end
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 of the
period
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, the production of both of them dropped drastically, to nearly 1 per day for each.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words non-opec, opec, countries, end, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World oil production
  • OPEC (Organization of Petroleum Exporting Countries)
  • Non-OPEC countries
  • Trends
  • Data analysis
  • Comparison
  • Oil reserves
  • Barrels per day
  • Percentage share
  • Production capacity
  • Fluctuate
  • Peak
  • Rise/increase
  • Decline/decrease
  • Over time
  • Crude oil
  • Export
  • Market dynamics
  • Energy sector
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