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Writing Samples
Band 5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying.

With the rapid development of communication equipment, reading online is a new trend of reading
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 in that case, someone holds the view that nobody will purchase printed newspapers or
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 anymore.
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, I don't agree with the idea, and here are some reasons below. First of all, the
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books
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 and coloured newspapers enhance the ability
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 memory.
People
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 tend to touch
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 and smell the ink, which can
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help them
memorize
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 the content they just saw
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 the
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. A recent study in the US illustrated that
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books
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 activate the memory area of the brain through the connection of touch, smell and vision , and the information retention efficiency is 30% higher than that of electronic reading.
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, reading
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 cultivates
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patience and concentration. Compared to
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books
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,
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books
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 can make readers more patient and focused. When we read
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, we often think of putting down the device
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 we can continue to read at any time, but with
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books
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, we have to read word by word until the book is finished. At present,
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 need to complete multiple tasks in a short time, which reduces their concentration.
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 reading
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books
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,
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's attention will be more concentrated, which helps to improve work efficiency.
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 the
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books
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 have advantages as well,
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, it's more convenient
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to carry e-books
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books
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 to carry, which means
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 can only take their cellphones to read multiple content, and most
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books
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 are free of charge, the
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 will never be substituted
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 the stability and spiritual value. In conclusion,
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books
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 serve as a medium that has been passed down by human
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 for more than
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thousands
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of
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years,
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books
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 carry cultural memories, and they will
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last
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 forever.

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coherence
Keep a clear plan. Start with your view and keep one main idea in each paragraph. Use more joining words to show how ideas fit in the view.
task response
Give more proof for each idea. Add at least two clear examples or facts. Explain how each point links to the main view.
grammar
Check sentence form and small grammar. Use short, simple sentences to avoid big mistakes.
structure
Clear stance and simple plan
evidence
A real study is used to back a point

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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